I groaned as I got out of the car. I realized that it was raining, so I ran under the roof of my soon to be house. I sat at the front porch as my mom unloaded the car.
“Could you come over and help me, honey?” mom asked politely.
I walked over to her and pulled out the suitcases out. I rolled them over onto the deck. I hated moving to a new house. Leaving my friends was hard, and the worst part was saying goodbye. I lifted the vase on the right hand side of the door. I grabbed the key and unlocked the front door. The inside was well lit and clean. I walked up to my bedroom and it brought back memories from when I was 5. I heard someone come in the house downstairs. That was probably mom. I decided to take a shower and clean myself up. After that I ran down to have some dinner.
“So, how do you like it here?” Vivian said happily. I turned my head from the kitchen counter and realized she was sitting on the living room couch watching TV.
“It’s nice, I guess”
“Is something wrong?” She said pitiful.
“No. It’s just that this place brings back a lot of memories,”
“Well,” she said turning her head back to the TV “you’ll have to get used to it. You’re going to live here until you graduate. Anyway, that won’t be so long considering you’re 16.”
“Ok, mom.” I said kindly.
“Oh, and Ebony, one more thing” she added “Get some rest. You look really tired” I smiled at her and made some food for the both of us. Vivian is and always was a bad cook, so I always had to cook the food myself. I left some food on the table so Vivian could eat some herself when she felt like it. I ate it slowly on the kitchen counter listening to the radio music. I ran upstairs to go to bed. I was all wet and in inappropriate clothes for sleeping. I really needed to change! I walked over the closet and opened it about to fall asleep standing. That would be possible in my condition.
I realized that it was empty. Oh yeah, I didn’t unpack yet. I ran down and tiptoed to my suit case and rolled it upstairs, making sure I didn’t disturb Vivian. I let it fall on my bedroom floor with a loud landing. I opened it and pulled out my shorts and shirt. I changed. I didn’t bother picking up my suit case or closing it. I was too tired. I plopped down on my bed and fell right asleep. That night I dreamt about my other friends and my city. I could feel the tears run down my face even though I was sleeping. It was a happy and an emotional dream at the same time. I woke up early morning. The sun lit on my face. It hurt my eyes. I jumped out of bed and went to brush my teeth, afraid of having some bad morning breath. Why is she awake so early? I don’t blame Vivian for thinking that. In my previous town, Akria, I had always woke up late, usually about 1pm.
“Come down stairs and have some breakfast, honey” Vivian called from the kitchen. I could hear the sizzles coming from the frying pan.
“In a minute mom!” I said walking into my room and slammed the door behind me. I quickly changed my clothes and ran downstairs and into the kitchen. Vivian kept her eyes on the frying pan.
“So how did you sleep last night?”
“I slept pretty well” I answered taking my seat on the kitchen chair.
“Good. But why did you wake up so early this morning? You usually get out of bed really late” she said, her voice full of wonder.
“I have no idea. It’s probably because I knew there was school today. I’m nervous”
“Well, you better eat quickly if you want to get to school on time. Schools starts at nine” she pointed to the clock hung on the wall right above the kitchen door.
It was already 8:30. I needed to hurry. Vivian plopped the burnt eggs and burnt bacon on my plate. Like I said, she was not a good cook. I ate as fast as I could. I ran upstairs and grabbed my bag and headed out the door.
“Honey, you forgot something!” Vivian yelled after me. I looked back and she threw me a key. “It’s for the car.” she informed me. I spotted some car in front of the garage. It was a 2018 Toyota car.
“Thanks, mom!” I yelled back at her. I hope she drives well. I sighed. Mom, worried again as usual.

Chapter#2 Shool

I ran towards the car and unlocked it with they key. The door opened and the lights were well lit inside. The T.V. lowered from the ceiling and the T.V. turned on. It was some old 60’s music video. I changed it to some other random channel. It turned out to be a pop music video from this year. “Ah, that’s the kind of 2020 pop music I like” I whispered to myself quietly. I started the engine. It roared like a lion, and then the sound faded. I drove all the way to school and parked it in the parking lot. I walked out of my car. There were a million thoughts. It was confusing. I couldn’t ignore them. I walked into the building. I could feel the stares on my back of the kids. They always want to know more about the new kid. I felt safe after I entered the doors of the administration. No more kids. Just staff members. I walked up to the lady at the front desk.
“Ex
sorry about the mistakes!! I’m going to revise it and change some parts. Thanks for your nice comments. BTW im only 11 and I wrote this
cuse me” I said politely in a soft voice making sure I wouldn’t disturb the others. She looked up at me with her blue eyes and her face happy. She had short brown pixy like hair. She looked too young to be working in an office in a school. Another new student. Good thing I have my map ready…. Seems like one of those soft people. I spotted her name tag. “Carla Shepry” Nice name I thought to myself.
“Oh. Hi there. It seems you’re new here. Would you like some help?” she offered in a soft sweet voice.
“Yes, I do. Could I please have a map and schedules for my classes?”
“Sure” she handed me two sheets of paper. One was the map, and the other was the schedule. “You have math first period”
“Thank you” She looked away and continued writing. What a sweet girl. I wish I stayed in high school That explains it all. I knew she was too young. I walked out and into the hall way. The kids were walking around everywhere. I didn’t know where to go. There were different thoughts and lots of thinking
. I was confused. I felt a tap on my shoulder. I had a quick reaction and looked back as if I thought it was a monster. I didn’t know my expression on my face. Was it scared? Sad? I had no idea.
“Hi there. I’m Maverick. Maverick O’Connor” he said politely with his hand held out. He had short blond hair with his bangs swiped to his right. I stared at him not knowing what to do. His hand was held out. Maybe I should shake. I held out my hand and we shook.
“Hi, I’m Ebony…. Ebony Vera Philips” my voice seemed a little shaky. He smiled when he heard my name. He seemed nice.
“It’s nice to meet you, Ebony Vera Philips” he smiled a bigger smile. We let our hands go and back to our sides. “Do you need help getting around?”
“No it’s fine. Have a map and schedule. I’ll figure it out… soon enough” I said smiling back at him. He laughed.
“What do you have first period?” he asked curiously.
“Math” I said in a low whisper. I could barely hear myself. Luckily my mind reading was turned to off.
He was probably thinking about how stupid I was. It’s a good thing I can read their minds but only when I want to.
“Oh! What a coincidence. So do I. Should I show you the way?” He smiled again, but not as big as the previous smile.
“Hmmm… Well, I guess. Show me the way tour guide” I laughed jokingly. He grinned. We started walking to class.
“So how do you like it here so far here in Spira High and College, Ebony?” he asked looking angelic as he was looking at the hall and glancing at me.
“It’s pretty nice I guess” I said shyly. He just smiled. We reached the stairs. It was white and shiny. We walked up the shiny stairs until we reached the 2nd floor. It seemed that was the top floor. We finally reached the math room. The door had a colorful sign which said “MATH!” on it. It had rainbows, calculators, and numbers surrounding it.
“Here we are. Math class. I’m going to have to sit with my friends, because I promised them. Do you mind?” He asked with a frown on his face. He looked

Why does she have memories if it’s a new house?
Why did she let the suitcase fall on the floor with a "loud landing" if she was just previously rolling it up the stairs so as not to disturb Vivian?
Also, you interject first person thoughts from Vivian into first person narration by the main character, which is confusing.

The mind-reading part doesn’t flow very well either.

Since you’re 11 it’s pretty good…. just a lot of dialogue and kind of a slow plot line.